Term 2 Week 3
W.A.L.T recall vents through the eyes of an animal.
Success Criteria I know I will be successful when my recount has a
- Title
- Orientation: When? Who? Where? Why?
- Sequence of events: What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell, and feel).
Personal Comment: How did the events make you feel
BABY BUFFALO’S!!!!
“I was walking on the river bank in the middle of my mum and dad but suddenly, my dad stopped for a second and roared like a mighty tiger, roaring to the herd, run for your life's save your self, As soon as I saw the lions I ran for my life, but then a lion gave a mighty jump and,Bang,the lion caught me in his sharp ferocious claws. I began to fall and I lost my control and then I fell to the ground,rolling into the river then after a while I got struck by a crocodile, It bit me on my thigh, it hurt like hell. I could feel the crocodile’s jaws digging into me.Then the herd came to rescue me from the lions, I said to myself, yay my mum and dad are back, I was surprised that they would actually come for me. The lions ran like a baby, Once the herd went for another walk this time the calves had to be in the middle so anything that tries to get us they have to go through the big Buffalos,My dad is really protective now because of what happened last time, if my dad see’s me sad or heart then he will get really angry,but just telling you it happened the next day and then the next and the next but all the baby buffalos including me and my friend we were all safe no matter what happens I will be always safe with the herd.
MY COMMENT!!!!
What happened last week was a disaster, now I have so much scars and I feel like I have a broken legs right now, because I got pulled,scratched, and bitten on my legs and thiy!but that doesn't mean I can or have to give up because I like trying because trying means personal best And I will not give up !!!.
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ReplyDeleteHi Tehya I'm Niel from St.Bernadette’s School, I like the way you put BANG for an expression in your story. I really like how you put no matter what happens I will be always be safe with my herd. I think that you should of put commas near the end , how could you fix the last long sentence in your story?
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