puppy days

W.A.L.T:  Write a narrative

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• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
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In Ako Ngatahi we had to write a narrative about a video. It was about a boy opening a present that was a dog with three legs. Here is the video of the present. I hope you enjoy my story.

The Present

Puppy days

I was just playing on my xbox.

My mum walked in the house and she has a box in her hands.   She puts the box on the table and she disrupts my game .

I open the box and a dog comes out,

But wait it has three legs, I chuck it away from me.

It comes back to me I kick it away from me and I say “get lost.”

He spotted a red ball the dog runs to it, he bumped into the cupboard, I laughed in my head. I started to get to know him and I started to know how he felt with three legs.   I said to myself well  I have one whole leg and I have one half of a leg.he has three whole legs and one half of a leg.   I started to feel happy well he does need a friend like him and I need a friend like me. he’s like me and I’m like him .  I got my the ball and I got my crutches and shouted to my mum “Mum ,well be outside”. I turned the door handle and the dog opened it more for me and him I threw the ball.   He ran to it so fast.   I said I want to call him Tomes.